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Tuesday, May 5, 2015

Failed But Unforgotten Concepts: The Unrepentant (Restless Nightmares Vol. 3)

It's been a while since I wrote a Failed But Unforgotten Concepts blog post, but I figured today would be a great time. With Restless Nightmares Vol. 2 finally released and the first draft of Restless Nightmares Vol. 3 wrapping up, there's no better time than today. Anyway, today's scrapped concept comes from Restless Nightmares Vol. 3. It was tentatively titled The Unrepentant. Check out the concept:

The Unrepentant followed Troy Walker, a death row inmate. Troy Walker is in his 6' by 9' cell with a ceiling ten feet high. There's a dirty toilet, a broken sink, a frail bed place and a thin mattress with little cushioning. From his dimly-lit cell, he can see the hall, but hardly anything else.

On the eve of his execution, Troy is confronted by the phantoms of his victims. Now, his crimes begin to unravel as the ghosts recount their crimes — grizzly stories that develop Troy's true character. The ghosts are Troy's wife and young daughter. Both apparitions are wearing their bed attire and they look tired — this was supposed to be a hint at what happened to them, or, at least, when it happened to them.

Troy is baffled by the ghostly appearances, but he can't seem to care. He's unrepentant and continuously claims his crimes were justified. In the end, as Troy is getting executed, he sees his family smiling and watching him die.
As you can see, I had an idea for the direction of the story, but there were significant plot points missing. Unfortunately, I simply could not complete the story. I loved the setting, it was more than the typical haunted house environment. I liked writing the troubled characters, too. I had some spooky and disturbing scenes planned. But, at the end of the day, I couldn't write a strong three-act story. There was something missing. I hope I can return to this concept in the future.

If you're curious, on Restless Nightmares Vol. 3, this story was replaced with a story tentatively titled The Devil's Nectar — this story will also take you out of the haunted house environment — I think it's a more than worthy replacement. I can't wait to share the new stories! If you can't wait either, don't forget: Restless Nightmares Vol. 2 is now available on Amazon! Thanks for reading!

Until our next venture into horror,
Jon Athan

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